It is not neccessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can just learn much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree ?
Most of people think that it is necessary to travel, to know about various cultures. But I agree with understanding of different cultures through books, films and the internet because it is entirely possible in the 4.0 era.
Firstly, people can save a great deal of time and money by watching movies, reading books and surfing the internet. This is cheaper than the high expense of abroad trips. And instead of spending many weeks and months to see and know about new cultures. For example, my cousin, although he has never been to China, he has so much knowledge of Chinese culture.
Secondly, the information from the media is limitless and was updated on a daily basis. You can find diversity view about this destination and avoid the risks. For example, after reading a book about Japan my friend didn't eat puffer fish because he had known it might contain poison.
Moreover, travelling to other places is not a simple thing and it may not suitable for the elderly, the invalid. So everybody can just learn from books, films, and the internet.
In conclusion, I believe that we can travel abroad if we want to have some experience. But we can learn more through travel guidebooks, films or the internet
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
Most of people think that it is necessary to travel, t...
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Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt cultures through books, films and the internet because it is entirely possible...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... books and surfing the internet. This is cheaper than the high expense of abroad ...
^^
Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...er reading a book about Japan my friend didnt eat puffer fish because he had known it...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 1615.20841683 62% => OK
No of words: 210.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80476190476 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49144113147 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638095238095 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 506.74238477 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.1641330373 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.6153846154 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1538461538 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336828081649 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101750716842 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093663791867 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173157357201 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960461582293 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
Most of people think that it is necessary to travel, t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt cultures through books, films and the internet because it is entirely possible...
^^
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... books and surfing the internet. This is cheaper than the high expense of abroad ...
^^
Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...er reading a book about Japan my friend didnt eat puffer fish because he had known it...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1009.0 1615.20841683 62% => OK
No of words: 210.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80476190476 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49144113147 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638095238095 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 506.74238477 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.1641330373 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.6153846154 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1538461538 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336828081649 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101750716842 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093663791867 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173157357201 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960461582293 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.