It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
There has been a matter of concern among people over whether traveling to natural areas which are a far distance from the residential areas, such as the South Pole. In my opinion, while this phenomenon can have some benefits, I believe that its drawbacks are more significant.
In the one hand, the main advantage of traveling to remote natural areas is that individuals can expand their horizon. In fact, instead of going to the familiar places which cannot satisfy the people’s curiosity, not only can having a trip to some isolated places gain unforgettable memories but it may also contain numerous amount of knowledge which has never been experienced before. For example, the South Pole, which is the main habitat of penguins, is an ideal site for scientists to do researches on this creature in particular and other environmental aspects in general.
In the other hand, I believe that this development may result in the negative development for humans. Firstly, going to remote areas can pose many considerable threats to travelers’ health due to the lack of geographical and biological knowledge about these destinations. For instance, visitors who go to the South Pole may not be aware of the severe weather condition, whose temperature can exceed the endurance of a typical person. Secondly, since modern facilities and transportation are required to secure people against dangerous situations, the trip to an isolated environment may cost a huge amount of money. Therefore, these costly trips which can only be afforded by a small group of rich tourists and scientists are limited to approach the middle-class.
In conclusion, while some advocates think that traveling to undiscovered natural environments can have some advantage, I believe that this tendency is much more disadvantageous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t individuals can expand their horizon. In fact, instead of going to the familiar ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in general, in particular, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32291666667 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08295597979 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590277777778 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.6421955087 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.363636364 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1818181818 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.0 7.06120827912 227% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250045493194 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937234396172 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725643173726 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143097230469 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040514078121 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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