The leaders or directors of organizations are often older people, but some people say that young people can also be a leader. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
For a long time, the leader position of organizations are mainly occupied by seniors. However, in these years, there is a voice that young people should also be given opportunities to become a director. In my opinion, it is reasonable to appoint youngsters as leaders according to their abilities and practical requirement of industries.
Those who are oppose to the youth to be leaders mainly concern several aspects as following. Firstly, compared with seniors, the biggest drawback of young people is the lack of experience, and this cannot be simply compensated by their enthusiasm and brave hearts. Since their empirical experience is inadequate, it is not easy for them to deal with complicate problems such as riots or rivalry competition. Furthermore, due to their impatient and impulsive, young leaders are prone to make rash decisions, which may result in some unimaginable negative consequences. Finally, many young leader are not as good as their senior counterparts in integrating the organization in order to improve the efficiency, which is critical as a leadership.
Despite those disadvantages, I will argue that young people have their relative benefits as well. Their biggest advantage is their specialized knowledge, which is especially obvious in high-tech companies. For example, Mark Zuckerberg, the CEO of Facebook, developed his company as one of the most successful ones in the world only at his early 30s. Besides, young people tend to be more vigourous, open-minded and innovative, all of which are essential characters in the modern corporations and governments. These characters could lead the development and reformation of the organization. In addition, young leaders could injure vitality into the organization, which is undoubtedly benefit to the organization.
In conclusion, while young people have their own deficiencies and risks as leaders, in some industries they should be encouraged to hold the post of leadership.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion: opposed
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'benefited', 'benefitted'.
Suggestion: benefited; benefitted
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51815181518 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21041883479 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594059405941 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9051595836 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.466666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244940576565 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819693378482 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571708642102 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161966293163 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471041984326 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.