In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
There is a common problem related to population that every nation must face. In many nations around the world, people living in rural areas are transferring to cities much more than ever before leading to a significant decrease in the population in these regions. Personally, this development negatively impacts people’s lives as it will lead to the demolishing of the economy of scale and badly affect the health of local residents.
First and foremost, decreasing population in the countryside may consequently lead to declining the economic growth of a country. This is because when people move out of these areas, it will decrease the number of labourers that contribute to the economic improvement of the countryside. All factors contribute to the development of a region, from macro factors, such as infrastructures, natural resources, etc., to micro factors, including culture, mankind, etc. will be badly damaged. Take Ho Chi Minh City as an example. A few years ago, seeing that Thu Duc province, a small rural place in Vietnam, witnessed a decrease in its economy due to shortening of residents, the government decided to to combine Thu Duc into Ho Chi Minh City and called it as a small city. This solution may partly help to revise the economic growth of Thu Duc province.
Secondly, this problem can also affect people’s health, in both physical and mental sides. In terms of physical health, as too many people together live in a limited-space place, production and other economic sides have to increase their productivity in order to fully adapt to people’s needs. Consequently, this rise may harm the environment, including boosting pollution, which surely impacts on human physical health. On the side of mental health, overpopulation leads to additional competition in several fields creating considerable problems, such as a rise in unemployment rates, lack of resources, etc. This, unintentionally, affects citizen’s mentality. For instance, when facing a rise in unemployment levels, residents may try to work as hard as possible in order not to get fired. The more they try to advance their capacity, the more ability people get into depression.
In conclusion, I do believe that it will affect negatively a nation when more and more people move to live in the urban areas rather than the rural regions. This change can decrease the economy of scale of a country and diminish resident’s health as well.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 694, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ng of residents, the government decided to to combine Thu Duc into Ho Chi Minh City a...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17215189873 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00896060713 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53164556962 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.848601468 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.526315789 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262207770298 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714071664596 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617111940594 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170120922427 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664735037932 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 694, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...ng of residents, the government decided to to combine Thu Duc into Ho Chi Minh City a...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17215189873 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00896060713 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53164556962 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.848601468 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.526315789 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262207770298 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714071664596 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617111940594 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170120922427 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664735037932 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.