In many countries, children are becoming obese. Some people think that only the government should be held responsible.
Do you agree or disagree?
More and more children are becoming vulnerable to many health risks, such as obesity, because of unhealthy foods they consume. Although I agree that the government is responsible for this, parents should also be held accountable.
To begin with, there are two reasons why the government should take responsibility. Since childhood obesity is a major public health concern, it is the government's duty to deal with it. Only the government has enough power and financial resources to heighten people's awareness or limit the amount of unhealthy foods available to children. Second, overweight and obese children are likely to stay obese until adulthood, which causes further issues such as higher associated medical costs or declining work productivity. Such problems have long-term economic and societal consequences, and thus are national concerns that only the government can address.
On the other hand, I also think parents contribute to this problem, and therefore should share the responsibility with the government. Many of the health threats children are facing are the result of poor food choices. Because parents are the ones making these choices, and not the government, they should therefore be held responsible. Also, many parents allow their children to live a sedentary lifestyle, which is another cause of childhood obesity. For example, many Vietnamese parents are too busy to cook, and therefore let their children eat fast food on a regular basis. This leads to a lack of nutrition and leaves children susceptible to metabolic diseases like obesity.
In conclusion, while some people say that the government is responsible for the serious health threats many children are facing, I believe that both governments and parents should share the responsibility.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
... major public health concern, it is the governments duty to deal with it. Only the governme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46739130435 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8848134616 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579710144928 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3396252565 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.785714286 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285094398356 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958938212682 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579913555999 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181861847614 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0332974457724 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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