These days, adolescents are said to become obese as well as have a sedentary lifestyle in various regions. Consequently, a number of individuals concede that the government should responsible for this issue. From my observation, I partly agree with this statement for the following reasons.
Apparently, it is undeniable that a competent and responsible government's duty is to ensure the welfare of its citizens. Thus, if a major hazard to the public exists such as teenagers obesity, the government should be the first to recognize it, offer remedies, and put them into action. To illustrate, the government can be able to reduce the number of fast-food restaurants - children’s heaven - as it is the main factor leading to the overweight problem in juveniles in recent years. Otherwise, the government should encourage kids as well as people to practice regular exercises and eat nourishing food. Hence, it is proved that the government plays a vital role to prevent youngsters from obesity.
Albeit with the crucial part in overweight’s prevention in children, the government should not accountable for this situation alone because parents have a larger effect on their children's destructive lifestyle. Doubtlessly, an obese child is typically malnourished due to a lack of nutrients in their diet, a fact that reveals parents' poor nutrition selections for their children. This finding also elucidates that by selecting healthy eating patterns that are low in sugar and fat, parents may have a direct influence on their offspring's health. Furthermore, obesity is caused by a lack of physical exercise. This can be seen in the sedentary lifestyle that many young people nowadays lean towards and parents are the only ones who can either inspire or compel their children to engage in more physical tasks.
In conclusion, my firm conviction is that being overweight is an alarming trend that causes the youth detrimental effects during their lives. Therefore, I assume that the government needs to do everything feasible to tackle the obesity pandemic no matter how little the impacts might be. Moreover, fat children's parents are to blame, and that they must take accountability for their children's ill status.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...niable that a competent and responsible governments duty is to ensure the welfare of its ci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29261363636 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9703668554 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602272727273 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0155532734 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.2 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251529967247 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811299584275 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578867346007 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147050581559 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512425070525 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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