In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, childhood obesity is a burgeoning issue in various countries, especially in developed ones in which people consume a massive amount of junk food. While I accept that the government should take action on tackling this problem, I believe that families have to share the responsibility.
To begin with, there are some reasons why the government plays an important role in reducing obesity in children. The first one is that children are shapers of a nation’s tomorrow. Their health problems will result in an unhealthy population which increases the burden on the society as a whole and prevents the development of a country. Hence, taking good care of youngsters’ health should be a government priority to guarantee the nation’s future. Additionally, there are some measures that only authorities have power to do. For example, none but the government is able to raise taxes on junk food or impose a ban on it from school menus.
Nevertheless, I maintain that parents have to control their offspring’s weight by some following solutions. Firstly, it is essential for them to educate children about healthy eating habits. To put it simply, families should not allow youngsters to eat out at fast food chains on a regular basis and should encourage them to eat a balanced diet. A diet rich in vitamins, fiber but low in fats can not only help them avoid being overweigth but also build up their immunity. Secondly, taking regular exercise is a fantastic way to burn calories and keep fit. As a matter of fact, many of children today are leading a sedentary lifestyle which makes them more prone to obesity.
In conclusion, I believe that combating obesity in childhood is a mutual duty of both the government and parents.
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- In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 89
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06551724138 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97513476548 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610344827586 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0300244584 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.9333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185065672944 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568303204026 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435464463429 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100713330127 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427306596847 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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