Many parents complain that computers games have no value to their children's studies. On the contrary, those online games have produced a lot of negative effects on their mental and physical development. What is your opinion?
computer games have been a famous hobby of young teenagers worldwide since the early years of the 21st century. This upsurge trend has brought a wave of controversial from the parents as in their point of view, online games affected the children in a negative way.
It cannot be denied that one of the main purpose of computer games is to entertain. However, besides from that benefit, these games are highly addictive. some data given by the public media throughout the world can illustrate such matters. More than hundred of young students were found to play computer game at certain centers during school time. As a result, students do not concentrate in studying anymore, and by the virtue of such action, either the study and the future will be influenced.
To be continued with, the indulgence in online games is detrimental to adolescents’ mental and physical well-being. According to some recent news, children’s behaviour is also influenced due to the online games being played. For example, some young has a tendency to be more violence in action and words after spending long time to play fighting games online. Additionally, the obesity in young people was recorded as increasing globally at the same time. Subsequently, those are direct results of passive lifestyle of teenagers which is less activities and more time for computer games.
In summary, online games are useless and adverse for the development of children. Therefore, it is the responsibility of schools and parents to educate and control the span the young access to the computer games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a hundred
... can illustrate such matters. More than hundred of young students were found to play co...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun activities is countable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13953488372 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84193912526 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596899224806 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.9955098008 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.7142857143 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231783487908 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078200788103 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058906699447 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149567228583 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596024761006 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.