Many people believe that the increased presence of violence in films and television these days
is responsible for the rising incidents of violent crimes among youths in society. They argue
that governments have a duty to control the media so as to reduce this phenomenon. Do you
agree with this argument?
Many are of the opinion that the rise in crime rates is attributable to the increase in violence in
movies and television programs. Some argue that governments should impose controls upon
the media in order to alleviate this problem. In my opinion, I agree that the media should be
controlled to a certain extent and that youngsters should only have access to beneficial and educational multimedia.
The media tends to have an extremely strong influence on its consumers, especially the younger
ones; it can affect how people think and what they believe. also, it may lead to undesirable and,
sometimes, disastrous behaviors ranging from bad manners to serious crimes; this is because
when youngsters are repeatedly exposed to such behaviors, they tend to view them as normal
and acceptable. also, often, criminals are glorified in films which leads children and teenagers to
admire and, thus, mimic them. Therefore, authorities should manage what media content
people are exposed to, which can be achieved in several ways. First, they can penalize parents
who are negligent about what their children watch and read. also, they should oblige schools to
extensively educate children about how harmful the sinful and criminal acts that are portrayed
in the media are as well as guide them about what to watch and do instead. Moreover, they
need to enforce restrictions on media outlets including television channels and social media
platforms limiting the appearance of violent content, especially to younger audiences.
In conclusion, governments, parents, schools, and media companies should play a role in
ensuring that the youth is not exposed to harmful content that can lead to crimes and
misbehaviors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52205882353 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73418452747 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591911764706 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2374396615 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.545454545 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7272727273 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181762306693 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729789864317 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523475346131 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0553390422373 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455011160275 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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