Many people believe that it is the school’s responsibility to teach children not to eat junk food.others believe parents should do this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
Nowadays,fast food become more and more popular among children,due to this,they become obese. A section of society deems that it is a duty of an educational centre to motivate kids to avoid consumption of junk food;whereas,other suggest that it is responsibility of progenitors. This easy will shedding light on both views along with my opinion.
One school of thought saying that school are playing important part in learner’s development that is why it’s responsibility of an educational institution to educates their students to neglect consumption of sealed food because it is cause of many ailments. In addition to this,school should not be sell fast food in their canteen as well as an educational centre should banned students to take junk food in their lunch box and in courage learners to give preference health and nutrition food in their meals and also serving that type food in their cafeteria. Apart from that,school should fine those students who catch to eat packed food in educational institute. For example, in 2018, sant. Marry school in patiala (Punjab) have banned to eat fast food in lunch box by students,due to see the health issues of learners.
The another school of thought describe that parents are playing crucial role in offspring is life,the reason is that children can learn any activity which are performed by their mother and father,so,it’s duty of guardian to motivate them to eat healthy and fresh food in the place of sealed food. Moreover,parents should consume a little proportion of time in their busy schedule to notice what their offspring are eating in meals and also never give money to kids to eat outside as well as mother can try to cook tasty and healthy food at home to satisfy the taste of their offspring is buds. For example,a number of overweight children under 14 become escalating day by day in British nations ,due to busy schedules of progenitors.
In my opinion,an educational centre and parents are necessary part of kids growth,so ,that is why they both have equal responsibilities to keep eagle eye on children’s eating habits and take some crucial steps to stop kids to eat sealed food as well as protect offspring from disease which comes from consumption of fast food.
In conclusion,although,parents have first duty for offspring,but school have also responsibility,so, they both try take some mandatory decisions to keep away far their kids from packed food.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, well, whereas, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2050.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.125 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24822643915 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4925 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.7501778891 49.4020404114 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.692307692 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7692307692 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257905460698 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949720354959 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467068735727 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144414549048 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050028816461 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.