For many years, celebrities have been major influencers to a wide range of people around the world. It is also believed by many people that children are the most influenced by them. Furthermore, extensive media coverage of these celebrities has had a negative impact on children. In my opinion, most of the children are a target of celebrity influence in a negative way.
As we are aware, celebrities these days not only feature in movies but also endorse various brands. Children who have a liking towards a specific celebrity prefer using these brands. For instance, since Shah Rukh Khan promotes LUX soap, his follower will prefer purchasing the same. Moreover, children these days also consider having a hairstyle similar to their favorite celebrity. Also, children watch movies and mimic dialogues while playing with their friends. These adaptations however do not have a good impact on children as they grow older.
As media content is unfiltered, children learn things that may not be appropriate to their age. Children imitate what they see in movies and on television which has a negative impact on their overall development. For instance, young children have started applying make-up which may have an adverse effect on their skin in the future. To add with, children have developed smoking habits at a young age as their favorite celebrity smokes too. Children have also started demanding expensive stylish clothes as they want to represent the style of a famous celebrity.
To conclude, I completely agree that the media coverage of celebrities has a negative impact on children. To make things worse, it is very easy for children to be influenced as they are too young to realise what is right and what is wrong.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ren are a target of celebrity influence in a negative way. As we are aware, celebrities these ...
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Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...s they want to represent the style of a famous celebrity. To conclude, I completely agree tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06643356643 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65816374874 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 14.7884739557 49.4020404114 30% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.2352941176 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8235294118 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344628511027 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121524095354 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729708087951 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222736026101 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714721852678 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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