Wanderlust is the key to happiness. For some people it is the escape from their busy schedule and for some it is risking their lives. This essay will include major drawbacks of undertaking extreme activities and people following this trend.
First of all, doing hand gliding, mountain climbing, river rafting and all other activities runs a chill down one's spine. Also, the rush of adrenaline doing these activities brings fun in one's life. Mountain climbing inculdes climbing huge mountains with proper gears and other safety equipments. It also includes physical fitness along with one's mental physchii to be balanced and in equilibrium.
Besides that, doing these adventures and risking our life is nor less than a stupid thing. One has to be fully prepared in order to encounter such extremity in life. Some people are not mentally strong and in peer pressure, following this trend may loose their precious lives. According to many scientific reports around 20% of people loose their lives due to their adventures turning into misadventures.
In addition to that, a newspaper reported a real life incident of man who went to mount Everest and later was interviewed. To my shock, he told that there were numerous dead bodies lying near the final point of the Everest peak. "Due to lack of oxygen cylinder and watching dead people lying near me, it was difficult for me to remain mentally strong and dedicated." One should think twice before taking extreme steps in life.
In my opinion, I truly suggest that doing adventures is a part of life. Everyone should enjoy their life to the fullest and feel the jiggle of hormones in their body but not at the cost of their precious life's. One should be mentally and physically fit to perform these tasks even under full safety and security.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, so, as to, in addition, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53905073798 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599337748344 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9758196255 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8235294118 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233283557266 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695942215689 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634007698381 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133033475391 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857738036018 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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