Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone.
What do you think are the reasons for this?
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is now quite common for people to own a mobile phone. However, with the benefits of this technological device, the daily using time rapidly increases. In my opinion, overused mobile phone is a negative phenomenon and it also create various causes.
First of all, there are a abundance of elements for people to devote all their spare time in using smart phones. Using smartphone is a solution for people who want to cop-out the real world. It is because they have to cope with many troubles in the modern life, such as: stress, increasing renting costs, relationship with colleagues, growing competitive in the workplace. At the same time, game companies various attractive mobile games which help their players become the people they wanted to be. As a result, the mobile game players constantly addict if they have an ineffective time management.
In addition, using a mobile phone regularly can bring some disadvantages. The most outstanding side-effect of overuse phone is that users will suffer from health problems. When people use their own phone, they usually observe their phone in a closely direction or put their head down to the device. Inevitably, this posture will damage the eye and cause pain in the upper body. Another possible negative thing is that individual easily become inadequate in the community due to lacking experience in verbal conservation. Thus, they undoubtedly are no longer forming closer or supportive relationships.
In conclusion, I believe that spending time in smartphone too much caused by different reasons and it also brings some health diseases and the users will tend to isolate with the community.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'creates'?
Suggestion: creates
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you mean 'side effect' (=adverse effect, unintended consequence)? Open compounds are not hyphenated.
Suggestion: side effect
...ome disadvantages. The most outstanding side-effect of overuse phone is that users will suf...
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Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('closely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('direction') instead of another adjective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17537313433 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76871454661 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626865671642 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2108705742 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4666666667 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179167874308 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057623675465 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422756518018 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105356502973 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191274874984 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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