Many people prefer to spend money and not save it What are the reasons Is it a positive or negative development

Expenses of the majority of people are much more than their savings. As far as I am concerned , social media and an improvement of marketing tend to be main causes of this case.
Currently, almost everybody uses the Internet, therefore it is accessible to watch bloggers' life as well as the variety of advertisements of goods. First, well-known people who run their own blog show their happiness which they have entertainment with their friends visiting luxurious hotels or restaurants, and recommend them to others. That is why, their Instagram followers also want to go to those places, where they ought to pay huge amount of money for that. Secondly, shopping centres use advertisements and discounts to attract customers to buy more products or clothes. For instance, if people watch an amazing advertising video which is created for one of the shops, they try to go there to buy certain items. However, discounts, that these shopping malls offer, make buyers purchase them too, eventhough they are not necessary.
This excessive spending, to my mind, has detrimental effects on people's life, like remaining without money on private budget and becoming stressful. If a person does not save any money for future life and only live for present days' fun, their budget can be over, and even they may fall into debt due to, especially, possibility of using credit cards. Consequently, people start worrying about their debt which are not easy to pay. After not being able to overcome this problem, they get stressed, and sometimes it could lead to suicide.
By way of conclusion, demerits of this trend in habits of spending money may outweigh its merits affecting people both financially and psychologically.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03180212014 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77310137783 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.685512367491 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2272725631 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.538461538 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10410061325 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.035781485793 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363711801598 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713891086927 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375500071202 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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