Many people think studying in university is a waste of time and money. They are supposed that young people should work for real experience. Do you agree or disagree?

Over the past decade, countries have witnessed a struggle of high school student about what to do after their graduation. While attending college is gaining its popularity, many people depreciate this option and support working for experience. Personally, I do not entirely agree with this view because of the following reasons.

To begin with, working right after high school graduation is recognized to be beneficial. In particular, applying for a job, young adults need to cope with the pressure of making a living, which assist them to be more mature and dedicated. Moreover, earning money also improves their financial status, and equips them with many life skills, like budget management or serving in a good manner. Therefore, it is safe to say that youngsters pursuing a career without attending college are more likely to find it auspicious to live independently.

However, the above option also has several drawbacks. Indeed, stepping into 21st century, when industries are dominated by modern technology, facilitating many automatic processes, youngsters may not be able to compete with machines to find an universal occupation. By the same token, there are also question marks over their lack of competitiveness in rigorous recruitments for top jobs. For example, state-owned companies in Vietnam usually flinch from employing a candidate without bachelor degree to work as an officer, since the knowledge s/he acquired at high school is not as academic as that of others who were trained by outstanding scholars at universities.

In brief, the post-high school decision still remains a dilemma what makes individual scrutinize in the future. It is because although working for experience right after graduation is advantageous; its minuses should not be overlooked.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e able to compete with machines to find an universal occupation. By the same token...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in brief, in particular, to begin with, by the same token

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46209386282 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97467228574 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.660649819495 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2080518954 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.384615385 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152193104765 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048572891883 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501627201234 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897000575878 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046023841447 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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