Many students are taught to push themselves and try hard to be better than their classmates, rather than work together for everyone’s benefits. Do the advantages of training students to be competitive outweigh the disadvantages?
People believe that nurturing plays an important role in building up children’s personalities and behaviors. In terms of that, there is a widespread contention over whether competitiveness is encouraged among students or not. It is believed that everything has its own merits and demerits while competitiveness is not an exception, which will be given as following.
Some people are opposed to the opinion of children’s competing with others due to several drawbacks. In the first place, children may be suffering tension or pessimistic feeling because they are under pressure of being ahead of others in their class. The pressure, statistically, also comes from teachers and their own parents. In addition, some people assume that competitiveness should not be performed in adults’ life, especially in work place. To specify, in a company, employees are expected to put effort into achieving common goals rather than personal ones. The one only focusing on his performance to benefit himself may be considered as selfish or lacking teamwork skill and consequently become isolated.
On the other hand, although competitiveness has its own disadvantages, the strong points cannot be ignored. The primary benefit that it brings about is that children will become more mature, independent, and dedicated. Competing with other students just, even only by obtaining a high score in class, also means that students are equipping themselves with a reservoir of knowledge and full hand of skills to run in a harsh race in the future. Some years later, after graduating from university, they will witness a struggling society with job opportunities and promotion chances waiting. Therefore, preparation renders it possible for them to climb their career ladder and fulfill their ambition of success.
Both sides considered, competitiveness shows both pros and cons. Children had better learn how to compete with others in an appropriate way to minimize the drawbacks that may come
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...better learn how to compete with others in an appropriate way to minimize the drawbacks that may come...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48701298701 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15814143311 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63961038961 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.205262753 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.625 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194323344121 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554735977146 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375660375319 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102950446112 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453705128866 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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