In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. Do you agree or disagree?
In recent decades, living conditions are getting better, thus awareness of humankind towards environmental issues is on the rise. Regarding this reality, the majority of people bear a thought that exploitation of creatures for foodstuffs, clothes and medication demands is no longer essential. From my perspective, I am in favor of those who support this opinion.
On the one hand, it is unable to deny the fact that people would reap certainly benefits from using animals for an abundance of purposes mentioned above. Initially, these species play a pivotal role in the way we acquire our requirements for food production and clothing. Therefore, they not only create millions of jobs for employees who work in related fields but also contribute a huge amount of money to the national budget of governments through the tax system. In addition, these species sacrifice their life for research and development of medicines. For instance, there are a large number of mice that have died in the progress of medical growth, this helps save thousands of lives.
On the other hand, despite obvious advantages of this phenomenon, however, I strongly believe that the drawbacks of utilizing creatures for people’s demands including nourishment, garments, and medicine should not be ignored. Firstly, the excessive exploitation of animals results in the unbalance of our bio-diversity. Image if there were no predators consisting of rhinos, leopards, and tigers in someday, the number of their prey including herbivores and smaller carnivores increase uncontrollably due to the wildlife would be unhinged. Secondly, the rearing species in order to serve medical experiments and the fashion industry is considered the main culprit of environmental pollution which is a result of gas emission from livestock’s dung and spreading serious plagues such as an influenza inflection, cholera, and diarrhea.
In conclusion, it seems to me that huge plenty of perks have been through the exploitation of animals, however, it is vivid that these species might experience pains or hurt as mankind, hence I concur with people who consider excluding animals from food, clothes and medicine purposes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...t of medicines. For instance, there are a large number of mice that have died in the progress of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43108504399 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03844018319 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624633431085 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5015002568 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.461538462 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2307692308 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6923076923 7.06120827912 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138971571907 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458694275468 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406195826244 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804650893075 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267704531584 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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