More and more people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes and other items. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive trend?
As our life is changing dramatically everyday, the desire for items from famous brand has risen. I strongly believe that this is a negative development.
There are many reasons why the brand is the first thing to come to people's mind when it comes to buying products such as clothes, cars,... First, the advertising campaigns showed up in everywhere, they appear on TV, Internet, on the street,.. Their slogans and remarkable logos are planted into our brain so as when we want to buy a product, we will thing of the famous brand first. For example, when it comes to fast food, the first place come to our mind will be KFC, McDonald's or Burger King. Second, as people life is being improved, the need for better product, become stronger. A lot of people believe that the famous branded product will always mean better quality and services, thus making people to purchase.
However, the development, as I believed, is being harmful to the culture. If a famous brand is widely used by people in a country, the local diversity and richness will be put at risk and causing the lost in national identity. For example, products from the West such as rigged jeans and sneakers makes some of the clothing tradition in some ethnic area disappeared. Moreover, due to the popularity of the trend, smaller brands hace less room to develop. Although some product from local brands has outstanding quality, people still choose the same product from a famous brand with low quality.
In conclusion, more people purchasing famous brand items like clothes, cars,... thanks to the influence of advertisement but this bring some disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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...reasons why the brand is the first thing to come to peoples mind when it comes to...
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Suggestion: people
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...to buying products such as clothes, cars,... First, the advertising campaigns show...
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...vices, thus making people to purchase. However, the development, as I believed,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61266084562 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581818181818 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9181104573 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257608802359 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859283301622 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061501915062 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174635375461 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550612744467 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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