Nowadays, as the Internet tends to develop rapidly and seem unstoppable, many people argue that it can be harmful to our society while others say that the development of the Internet can bring more advantages than its demerits into our lives. In my opinion, I partially disagree with the statement that the improvement of the Internet would release as many merits as its demerits.
Nowadays, as the Internet tends to develop rapidly and seem unstoppable, many people argue that it can be harmful to our society while others say that the development of the Internet can bring more advantages than its demerits into our lives. In my opinion, I partially disagree with the statement that the improvement of the Internet would release as many merits as its demerits.
On the one hand, it is clear that the Internet arise would lead to many potential disadvantages. The first drawback would be the respective arise of spam mails and incorrect information throughout social media. For example, in today's technological world with the gradually develop of high-tech devices and social networking, the situations in which criminals manipulating the lack of Internet knowledge from people such as the elderly to earn profits thus also increase. Furthermore, as the Internet always contains a variety of entertainment, it, therefore, would distract people from work and is also addictive. That is because of the frequent appears of Advertisements from profit companies that are highly tempted. Consequently, people, especially youngsters and employees, would spend overtime to enjoy these entertainments and lose their productivity at workplaces. In other words, the Internet can be extremely harmful as people try to utilize to much time on these distractions.
On the other hand, apart from the above disadvantages, there are even wider benefits that the grow up of Internet can create. Internet' s applications can help people in every life aspect such as communication, adapt to the globalization, or for educational purposes. For instance, nowadays, with the born of social media such as WhatsApp, Facebook, Twitter, companies are now able to contact and integrate information from all over the world through video conferences and webrings, therefore, would raise their productivity significantly. Education would also gain a lot of advantages from the arising of the Internet. That means that with fast, convenient, and safe connections from the Internet, children can now research information and absorb knowledge simply through a tiny Macbook. As a result, the achievement and quality in educational corners would then be rapidly developed as more and more talented youngsters appear.
In conclusion, whereas the Internet's disadvantages are undeniable, its advantages are still outweighing its own drawbacks.
- The bar chart below shows the types of music bought in the USA in 2010 by age group Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 77
- Children should allow every parents' advice. 50
- The bar chart below shows the numbers of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 73
- The line graph demonstrates the proportion of tourists visiting four different destinations in Edinburgh, Scotland, in the period 1980 and 2010. 100
- The youths should allocate time for cultural activities such as music and theatre rather than for sports 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 952, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...remely harmful as people try to utilize to much time on these distractions. O...
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Line 9, column 108, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...that there are even wider benefits that the grow up of Internet can create. Internet s a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52925531915 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15801482926 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547872340426 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5120693521 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.9375 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.625 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441363874838 0.244688304435 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13952227176 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.216477395196 0.0667982634062 324% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318861066895 0.151304729494 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.281063893799 0.056905535591 494% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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