Nowadays, more and more people want to travel to remote areas such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this type of travel outweigh the disadvantages?
it is true that scientists and tourists now can journey to the remote natural environment, such as the South Pole, while some people think it is beneficial, I am of the opinion that the drawbacks are more serious to consider
To begin with, there are some advantages of travelling to the remote natural environment. Firstly, this help scientists find out a huge range of new species and discoveries. In another word, a remote natural environment provides a large number of species because it is an ideal living environment for unusual species and no one knows about these places. The discoveries which contribute to the science of the nation will help to create many new species. secondly, new findings will contribute to the growth of the area. In addition, if an area becomes popular, there will be a lot of tourists visit it and the local authorities will earn more money to spend on the development of the area. For example, desert used to be the developed area but these days, it attracted a huge number of visitors each year because of its magnificence and start improving step by step to become one of the most popular places for tourists who like an adventure. As a result, the local authorities will have more money to improve the citizens' lives.
However, I am firm of the opinion that there are more demerits of travelling to remote natural environment. Firstly,this activity will damage to the environment. Moreover, when visitors come to this area, the environment can be polluted by many effects from people such as throw away the rubbished, the destruction to the plants and animals in there, even stoling new species in this area to make money. taking africa where has a lot of wild animals, there are some places in Afirca attrach many visitors but beside the advantages, some people start catching a huge range of wild animals, even uncommon animals. Therefore, the number of species will decrease significantly, not only africa but also the research of scientists is affected. secondly, having a journey to the remote natural environment is extremely dangerous since the terrain is an impediment, especially for children. In addition, if people dose not attend to around, they can be hurt or even die. For example, last week my sister went to the mountainous region and she almost dies just because she does not notice and take a false step and almost fall to the abyss.
In conclusion, these days, scientists and visitors can totally have a trip to the remote natural environment. T firmly believe that travelling to these areas is associated with serious short-comings which far outweigh the benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 443.0 315.596192385 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94130925508 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76659385333 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48532731377 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1948126887 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.611111111 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.88888888889 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206260075001 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619367618554 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071011248284 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140264120008 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289369635403 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.