Nowadays, more and more young people hold the important positions in the government. Some people think that is a good thing while others argue that it is not suitable.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There is little room for doubt that young people play a vital role in the country's development, in fact more and more of them take up important government's positions. While people hold different views whether the role of the young on those positions is suitable or not, I am of the opinion that it should be fair to give them a chance.
On one hand, I truly understand why some people have a doubt in the young . Firstly they are not well-prepared and experienced enough to make such a serious decision. It means that their sights are not far and wide enough to see the consequences and in the end, they tend to mess up the whole situation, which lead to their nations into wars, especially when it involves in foreign affair. Secondly, they are full of recklessness and risk. In the elderly's mind, these future leader consider their decisions as a gamble. And somehow with the impact of wrong people on their decision-making skills, one's nation would be at risk of destruction.
On the other hand, giving young people a chance to prove themselves is more significant. To begin with, whenever someone mentions the young, what comes to mind is their enthusiasms and fresh perspectives. This means that they are more likely to adapt the fast-paces era, compared to their seniors. Additionally, these people are always full of energy, which can be the beneficial factor when it comes to parades, charity works, etc. Secondly, young people are creative and up-to-date. while old people always play with the rules, these young are sick of old systems and more like to break them. As a result, they can bring their nations to a new level. Finally, the younger they are , the more time they have in order to gain knowledge. For example, the prime minister of France and Canada are young but the efficiency they have brought to their countries are remarkable.
In conclusion, the important role of the old in the government's system is undeniable. However it does not demonstrate that the young cannot have a chance to give them best. It appears to me that more and more young people in government's positions is more notable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78746594005 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65490277612 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517711171662 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1056706395 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.85 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288297544292 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09213162435 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0977609096048 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205402035676 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918847839107 0.056905535591 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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