There has recently been a debate about the uprising of surveillance to citizens daily life. While some of the citizens believe that the surveillance has invaded personal life, most of the citizens think the new technology will ensure a better living style in many ways.
On one hand, people lose privacy when their daily life are being monitored. A recent study shows that 70% of the population with smart phones are unaware that they are being monitored. The new technology provide cell phone with a smart tracking device which allow the server to access each cell phone physical location. This feature expose the geographic location of individual. Additionally, installing security cameras to a building do not stop crime. They bring the criminal to justice after the crime happened. The security cameras can not protect a building but to introduce a visual warning to those criminals. A security system is costly to the residences for this reason.
On the other hand, the new technology provides citizens with better living in many ways. The camera installs on individual smart phone allow people to have visual and low cost conversation from one end to another. New developed software likes skype are using wifi connection instead of traditional phone line. The connection transmits data which is much cheaper and more user friendly. Another advantage of using remote surveillance system is to allow fast response time to real time situation. New hospitals have the cameras installed to monitor patients daily life. The monitoring system ensures individual's emergency is addressed immediately.
To conclude, despite the fact that more and more privacy issues due to the popular monitor technology, the new technology provide us a convenience and quality of life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...veillance to citizens daily life. While some of the citizens believe that the surveillance ...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'exposes'.
Suggestion: exposes
...l phone physical location. This feature expose the geographic location of individual. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28975265018 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69838832532 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56890459364 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6765662013 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1666666667 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7222222222 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 7.06120827912 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193461229349 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557200409371 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383750526492 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990965557052 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557461983141 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.