opinion essay some people believe that schools do not do enough to teach students about their own health, do you agree or disagree

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opinion essay

some people believe that schools do not do enough to teach students about their own health, do you agree or disagree

It is well understood that schools have vital roles to play, preparing students for the long run future. A contention, however, is made that still no enough health education is delivered to the students. I would rather concede that school boys are less aware of this issue, which can be seen in many aspects.

Obviously, school curriculums have fewer health materials, that could positively reflect on health awareness of the students, it can be seen that obesity figures have risen considerably among school boys, that is because of insufficient dietary awareness. The overwhelming majorities are enticed by the junk foods as well as sugary drinks found in the school's canteen. Furthermore, schools syllabus are mainly focused on delivering theoretical subjects, such as history and geography. Sporting activities are always restricted, as they are considered to set them for academic failure.

Additionally, a supportive point that suggesting impoverish of heath education in the school schedules, the fact that there are increased numbers of teenagers pregnancies among school girls, this simply indicate that schools do not provide enough sexual education that helps to avoid such an early pregnancy. Moreover, in a country, such as Sudan, the educational policies say, biological and health teaching are only to be provided to those wanting to go on to medical schools, thus, a minute number of students could have to sufficient biological studies.

In conclusion, having looked at the above points that educational institutes would provide less health education to the students. I would rather suggest that more efforts are required that is to raise heath awareness among school candidates

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...s as well as sugary drinks found in the schools canteen. Furthermore, schools syllabus ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, look, moreover, still, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50378787879 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86699888763 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598484848485 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.6989632904 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.090909091 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146060851351 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496217619832 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347863462347 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0853692713758 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364484761659 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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