Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on studying and more time on physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people believe that children should engage more time in outdoor activities rather than on studying, and this should be encouraged by their parents. From my perspective, while I accept that physical activities bring several benefits to children, focusing on studying is also crucial.
On the one hand, spending less time on studying can take a toll on children. Initially, learning play a role in their success. It can help children broaden their perspective about everything around, equip children with huge amount of knowledge about every aspects of life. Consequently, it can help children make informed decisions independently. Moreover, the encouragement of spending less time on studying can make children loss focus on learning, leading to decrease in academic performances. In addition, perhaps this encougarement make kids have a feeling that study is not necessary, a detrimental effect in long term.
On the other hand, children can have numerous advantages when spending more time on physical activities. Firstly, outdoor activities play a role in their physical development. In fact, there are several kids suffering from obesity due to their sedentary lifestyle. Therefore, physical actitivies can make children have an active lifestyle, prevent the risk of some diseases, and improves their fitness. In addition, when children play outside, they can have the exposure with vitamin D, one of the most important factors affect their height development. Furthurmore, outdoor activities can also provide children several personal skills, such as teamwork and problem-solving, and make them have a closer connection with nature.
In conclusion, learning is a essential factor contributing to children’s sucess; however, it not the solely affecting on children’s development, physical activities also play a role.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to play'
Suggestion: to play
...a toll on children. Initially, learning play a role in their success. It can help ch...
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Line 4, column 28, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...th nature. In conclusion, learning is a essential factor contributing to childr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67636363636 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07647109204 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570909090909 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9614258449 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.066666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.93333333333 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324399729872 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123403794933 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867016311026 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21188664411 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686451726727 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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