Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on studying and more time on physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It has raised a public concern over the past decades that children should be supported by parents in taking more hours to practice physical activities instead of spending all time on learning. I thoroughly agree with this assertion that parents should urge their children to limit the amount of hours of studying and increase more time on outside activities; and in this essay, I will support my idea with examples.
For a variety of reasons, it would be true that spending less time on studying will still help students obtain grades at school. Children can totally find an effective learning method by themselves because better grades do not require an exact amount of learning time which students must spend. Taking Mai Lan Huong who is recognised as one of the best students in Vietnam as an example, in her interview, she shared that she optimized her learning time by concentrating 100% on learning and being not distracted by the notifications of phones or other matters.
Another reason why I support it is that children can take a toll on their health unless they do any physical activities for a long time. Children need to improve their mental and physical health by physical activities. Therefore, parents should consider whether their children get better results at the expense of children’s health. The onus of the more hours on learning of children is on their parents. Parents want to be proud of the grades of their sons or/and daughters in a cut-throat competition about high scores.
In conclusion, I fully support the view that children should spend more time on activities which force them to have body movements and less time on learning. Although a topic will polarize public opinion, parents should prime their children’s health.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to time'
Suggestion: to time
...not require an exact amount of learning time which students must spend. Taking Mai L...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03754266212 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64959864517 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535836177474 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9808374952 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431671686587 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168200870613 0.084324248473 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758458454466 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280335534876 0.151304729494 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784163719996 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to time'
Suggestion: to time
...not require an exact amount of learning time which students must spend. Taking Mai L...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1476.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03754266212 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64959864517 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535836177474 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9808374952 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.0 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431671686587 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168200870613 0.084324248473 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758458454466 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280335534876 0.151304729494 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784163719996 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.