In the past when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country.
Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments and relevant evidence.
These days, students around the world have the chance to continue their tertiary education overseas. However,
before they mainly finished their degree in their local country. Should we praise far-reaching benefits of
this opportunity or take into account more its shortcomings?
Moving around the world is enjoyable as well as beneficial when it comes to studying at university. There is a evidence that
it will undoubtedly have perspectives to career prospects. My foreign language techer, as an example, has finished
his degree in the UK, and after he had graduated the university, we was offered to perspective job there. Secondly,
students studying abroad will feel responsibility, more precisely, living apart from their family encourage
them study hard. My cousin, who is now living in the European country, has started his own business after
graduation and therefore higher standard of living compared to us. The last but not least, students who never
visited foreign countries will definetely experience new adventures. For instance, the friend of mine has travelled
across the Europe thanks for the funding from his university.
In contrary, obtaining a degree overseas also has a negative impact on both students and the workforce
in their lcoal countries. The way of education in developed countries totally differs in comparison with
that in developing ones. Hence, most students permenantly abandon their local countries and endeavour to
adapt to the new culture. One of my acquintance was studying in the USA, when I entered to the university.
Although we get into together with her, apperantly we will never meet each other for abovementioned reason.
Another drawback could be culture shock for those who has recently migrated to new country. Take an example of
my exchange program at my university. I had aced all the examinations in the end of midterm before applying to study
in Korea for six-month period. The culture of that country makes a difference than ours, therefore I several
times failed to make new friends. Lastly, a great deal of students are moving to new countries and the workforce
in local countries is suffering from lack of talented employees.
In conclusion, more student prefer study in foreign countries rather than staying in their local countries.
In spite of comprising from career promotion to broadening the horizons, this oppotunity has disadvanteges.
I believe, the advantages outweigh its drawbacks without doubt.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43846153846 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90388322838 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574358974359 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9245670321 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.2173913043 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9565217391 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17391304348 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 4.38176352705 548% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230064762917 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600800832411 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487893358197 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0589943715812 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467797720227 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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