It is a heated debate whether people should care about their well-being for their own benefits or for social responsibilities. I believe that both purposes are important and people should take an interest in both.
It is understandable that taking care of their health can benefit them personally. First, maintaining good health allows people to perform well in other activities, including playing sports, working, or traveling. People in bad shape, in fact, are limited in the range of activities they can do, such as those suffering from heart diseases are not permitted to ride a roller coaster, or those with diabetes are confined to engaging in dangerous sports. Second, good health brings about a good appearance. Indeed, recent scientific studies reveal that people who have a balanced diet with a lot of vegetables and fruits tend to have a smooth complexion, bright eyes, and healthy hair.
However, the responsibility of taking care of one’s self for society’s overall wellness is also crucial. One compelling reason is that an ill person may be a threat to the larger population when the disease is highly contagious. In fact, the outbreak of COVID-19 in 2019 started with a few misdiagnosed individuals, but killing numerous citizens across the world. Furthermore, unhealthy individuals can be a burden to society and further hurt the economy. Take the spread of SARs in 2002 as an example, it disclosed that the total global cost of lost economic activity was up to millions of dollars after the end of the epidemic.
In conclusion, although taking care of health is needed for one’s own benefit, it also plays a vital role in ensuring the nation’s well-being, which confirms the social responsibility of each individual in maintaining their health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1875 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94064219911 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621527777778 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8312095294 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.923076923 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22269084422 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733239963741 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698228396149 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142139544902 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631310429022 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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