The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.
Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.
Childhood obesity is a serious medical condition that affects children. The percentage of obesity among children has climbed in western society, by almost fifth in last ten years. This essay will argue the causes and effects of over increased weight around children.
The variety of causes have contributed to the boom in rates of overweight attributed to changes in our way of life. Starting with young children, who eat candies and deserts, have become overweight because of sugar and preservatives. Slowly, they are dying by eating unhealthy food, which contain preservatives and hydrogenated oil, such as Mcdonald’s and Kentucky. More over, children who don’t exercise are more likely to gain much weight, as well as children who spent too much time in sedentary activities, such as watching television or playing video games. Furthermore, society and family stress can increase a child’s risk of obesity. If a child comes from a family of overweight people, the child may be more likely to be overweight.
This increase of obesity around children has far-reaching effect on both sides, individual and societal level. Being overweight has been linked with higher mortality and illness rates. Children, who suffer from unhealthy overweight, known to have high blood pressure and heart diseases. Children are the heart of society, with more children reaching obesity levels means a stain on our economy is created. Increased illness means students are taking more sick leave, thereby less educated children, thus less future employees.
In conclusion, sedentary lifestyle, lack of exercises and unhealthy food leds children and countries to hell. More specifically, health system won’t be able to accommodate all this number of sick children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46886446886 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78933820584 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7399438935 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.3125 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0625 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265167576024 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874046610252 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688204457729 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168955697661 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935660034506 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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