The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?
Regarding the increasing portion of youth who are facing with obesity in developed countries over last decade, we need to focus on psychological components of modern lifestyle and the implemented tricks that huge food and beverage companies are widely using them.
Looking at causes of developing a unhealthy lifestyle in adolescents, the most conspicuous approach is the insatiable interest of families in some foods that are harmful. Subsequently, due to the imitation of children of their parents and eye-catching appearance of these products, they would rather to consume them. Moreover, Considering the recent developments of advertising industry, huge brands and franchises are well-equipped with the recourses that can help them in order to create provocative and misleading advertisements more efficiently. As a consequence, the youngsters will trap in brand attachment and Poor quality products which was subtly instilled by mentioned organizations.
As a result, children who have deceived by gimmicks will put these less-than-healthy foods in their daily diets which will put their lives at great stake.they put themselves at the risks of respiratory ailments and cardiovascular diseases which are more common in people with overweight. Additionally, it will deter them from obtaining an active lifestyle and would raise the probability of future addictions.
It should be finally commented that consuming unhealthy diets like pre-prepared meals has a detrimental effect on our body system. Therefore, families should correct their food habitation and companies must not deceive youngsters with advertising high-calorie products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82157676349 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32164868352 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.655601659751 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.0638909138 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.888888889 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7777777778 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.77777777778 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0537580897442 0.244688304435 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0197577874693 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0182783503447 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0321011051126 0.151304729494 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00965174990065 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.0946893788 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.63 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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