At present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of young people.
do the advantges of this situation outweigh the advantages?
it is believed that number of young generations in many countries are particularly higher than number of older people. this phenomenon, i personally agree, would bring about more significant advantages that will be explained why in this essay.
Regarding the benefit, perhaps, the young people have more longer time to be productive work. this means that, they are able to create and generate goods and services. this is because periode of productive work occur between 18-years-old and 55-years-old, and this range they have more endurance of good mental and physical to work as employees. For instance, some companies require young employees in hope that they are able to work more longer untill they are retiring. Meanwhile, old people tend to spend more time in rest because their mental and physical condition are unsustainable to be productive. Additionally, development countries can be clearly seen from community income. If some states have many unemployment surely economic conditions are being unhealthy. Therefore, with much young people as workers and employer, they help to advance the country’s economic growth. For example, Indonesia have several young people producing small businesses such as coffee shop in mini van.
However, the contribution of elder people could not be denied and they have already done their part of reforming country. they have vast experience and historical knowledge that are vital for making decision. they are often considered better fit for decision making positions and tax they have paid their entire life made the progress of the country possible.
To sum up, it seems to me that, young people are more benefit for countries such as having more time to be productive in working and producing some small businesses to help development economic. Furthermore, the older people have more experience to make decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38775510204 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80183758613 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554421768707 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8368967476 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156620765043 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600974216968 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639112774204 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113731018562 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819357880679 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.