At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

It is a phenomenon in current days that there are certain nations enjoyed a higher quality of the youth than the elder. From my perspective, it is a huge blessing for those countries with such priceless treasure.

Young men do play an indispensable role in the development in social life. To begin with , young people are representing the direction of sophisticated technologies. For instance, the founder of Microsoft, Bill Gates , wrote codes of MS-DOS at the age less than thirty ,bringing in the wave of software empire to conquer the market monopolised by IBM. Besides, it is going without exaggeration that young people contribute more proportion in consumption so that the economy are able to be sustainable. To modify their lives, purchasing from brand new clothes to the real estates is not rare, which definitely secures the promising prospect of market so that the welfare supported by the governments can be back up; Otherwise there will be a series of deficits appearing on the policy makers' account, triggering the dilemma such as striking, demonstration or even uprising . Thus , it is no wonder that more youth will absolutely bring more pros.

Nevertheless, a few drawbacks are also worthy to be observed . On the one hand, the elder, with abundant experiences accumulated during work and life, should not be ignored. Because they will stay calm and solve the problems without any friction if some accidents out of control happens. On the other hand, the progresses in every field are not only built in the creation, but also arising from the knowledge left by older generations,sometimes,even a few generations.No fruit would have been born if researchers refused accepting the existing skeleton of knowledge constructed by their seniors.

In conclusion , my firm conviction is that young generation is , in the light of the above views, indeed outweighing than the elder, whereas we should not ignore the precious experience and knowledge owned by older generations.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, nevertheless, so, thus, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21875 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17850741814 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6375 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.5157910718 49.4020404114 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.461538462 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0859247762822 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030576515038 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279100677498 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0505961797878 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121946639002 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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