At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, in various countries the quantities of youth citizens have been sharply increased and as a result they more than elderly population. From my point of view, the advantages outweigh the drawbacks. This essay includes either pros and cons’s ideas and evaluates main points.

The main advantage of having younger country than the older one is development on the industrial markets. Indeed, youths are more energetic and have an encouragement to deal with hurdles and remove them and consequently, they tend to achieve their goals more than any others. These good circumstances give rise country to be promoted. The other plus side is young people more keen to change the society as well as reform the policies. These are be welcomed by youths instead of elders which hold traditional opinions. As a consequence, younger people willing to make a relationship with other countries and lead country to promotions.

Although the advantages were noticed, it has a main drawback. People’s distribution into two categories isn’t always useful. Governmental failure decisions as well as absence of employment opportunities can increase the amount of criminal activities. As a result, this would intimidate business persons, engineers, managers and even subjects and migration will be the mainly decision in their life’s career. For instance, Kenya where most of the professions are youths and these days country has been terrorized by the jobless teenagers and they have to kidnapped to earn money.

In conclusion, weighting up both side of the argument, I would say government should preserve of young adults as well as regulate fundamental opinions according to both morale and employment.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic
Essays by the user:
>>> more essays by the user >>>

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... well as reform the policies. These are be welcomed by youths instead of elders wh...
^^
Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...weighting up both side of the argument, i would say government should preserve of...
^
Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ernment should preserve of young adults as well as regulate fundamental opinions according...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46240601504 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00918421933 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3515858995 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7333333333 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10960289166 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379701673916 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319239909145 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622394198667 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337291399536 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.