Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Agree or disagree?
While some nations consider custodial sentence as an effective intervention to reduce the number of criminals, others think that it is better if we solve the problem on the base of education. Although I partly agree that advantages of prison are undeniable, I believe that we should implement other solutions.
On the one hand, prison sentence clearly has some benefits. First, many countries impose the full weight of the law by serving a prison sentence, which acts as a deterrence. It is clear that governments should be tough on some severe crimes to prevent people from commiting illegal activities like killing or drug trafficking. Secondly, prison plays an integral part in protecting other law-abiding citizens from threats of dangerous offenders. Mass murderer is a typical example, they consider murdering as a way to seek out a sense of accomplishment and even just get a whale of time, and therefore, authorities should keep them in prison for the shake of other people’s safety.
On the other hand, we should carry out non-custodial approaches apart from prison to tackle crimes thoroughly. Firstly, parental involvement has an enormous impact on shaping children’s personalities, so we should raise children’s awareness about public obligations and laws through their parents. For example, governments should allocate more resources on providing parents with psychological courses so that they have many appropriate ways to educate their own offsprings. Secondly, unemployment is a popular reason which pushes many people into resorting to crimes, thus governments should organize more vocational courses aiming to reduce the number of unemployed residents. Consequently, when people have career prospects, they can make ends meet by themselves, instead of turning into crimes such as thieves.
To sum up, I partially agree that prison sentence is still necessary, nevertheless, governments also should solve other issues through better education to ensure their citizens have better lives and drop the rate of crimes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for example, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50955414013 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01187690502 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611464968153 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3152193851 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.076923077 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214774565676 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707321514291 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403581774029 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129703244774 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0130750328063 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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