Q2: Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the issue of young people’s education has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that secondary school students should be obliged to undertake community service, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from mandatory voluntary activities for teenagers. Perhaps the principal benefit is that attending voluntary work makes it possible for the youth to learn the importance of supporting socially disadvantaged people, which enables them to feel a sense of belonging to local society and strengthen social bonds. In addition, adolescents are capable of developing interpersonal skills that will be invaluable in their future careers given that the majority of large corporations have a predisposition to hire job seekers who are good at empathising with others. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that young individuals can reap a myriad of advantages from obligatory volunteering.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that mandatory voluntary work merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that being forced to partake in voluntary activities can exert a detrimental influence on students’ academic performance as devotion to these activities often prevents pupils from spending a huge amount of time to revise for their exams. Furthermore, a multitude of youngsters are more likely to experience high levels of stress as voluntary work can deprive teenage boys and girls of a chance to participate in leisure activities helping them to unwind. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
- Q16 In some countries the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 78
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- Q19 The family has a great influence on childen s development but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children s life Do you agree or disagree 84
- Q6 Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools Others however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, second, so, then, while, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38278931751 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0079567048 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605341246291 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3780178246 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.571428571 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0714285714 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150876483717 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489003981097 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042413212415 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837628678394 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504010331411 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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