The recent years' sports stars have become increasingly famous and wealthy. For some this is a benefit, raising the profile of sports, but for others it is a negative influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, well-known sports players are becoming significantly popular and affluent. This created mix reactions between people, as this is believed by some that money and fame are good motivators for athletes to get better results. Conversely, this idea is refuted by others. These points of view will be discussed in this order.
Firstly, one common argument is that hope for gaining wealth would increase people's desire to perusing a sport. Some best football players have lived in poor families and have raised in inappropriate conditions. While being rich and famous has been the most important motivation for them for years. It can be argued that trying to make money had been a good catalyzer for a sportsman. Thus, it is clear why many support the idea that money is a good motivation for following achievable goals for most athletes.
On the other hand, another argument in favor of sportspeople earning substantial money is that it makes the sport more attractive. However, it is believed by some that wealth should not act as the main motivation for sportspeople. because there are more important factors like enthusiasm for the sport, team loyalty and physical fitness that would be necessary for success in sports activities. Take Michael Phelps as an example, he was born to be a swimmer, because his physical characteristics facilitate his movements while swimming in the Olympic games. So it is obvious that Fame and money solely could not lead necessarily to a better sports career. Thus, it is understandable why some refuted the idea that money is a good motivator for all sportspeople.
In conclusion, it is unlikely that money and fame earned by sportspeople will reduce any time soon but this trend of more money and attention in not beneficial to sports overall.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0813559322 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82573636085 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562711864407 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1716878148 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6875 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23457110661 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811944825955 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393972879635 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13968136727 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611446163751 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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