In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievements. Some people believe that individuas can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievements are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success
The concern of the link between equality and personal success has experienced an unstoppable rise of popularity. I completely agree that people can achieve more in this kind of society.
On the one hand, education would be one of the greatest example for the close relationship between social equality and personal success in life. It is undeniable that all children should have access to free schooling, and higher education should be either affordable. By this way, people can pursue a university degree which open doors to a number of opportunities later in life. However, in society without free schooling or affordable higher education, children in wealthier families would have access to the best learning opportunities, therefore they can be better prepared for the job market while at the same time, students living in poverty do not have many options. This inequality can ensure success of some people but harm the prospects of others.
In my point of view, i believe that equal rights and opportunities are not in conflict with people's freedom to succeed or fail. In other words, equality does not mean that they could lose motivation to succeed or not to be allowed to fail. In contrast, people living in egalitarian society may feel more motivated to work hard and reach their full potential because they thought that they lived in a fair society. However, an inequality community could demotivate people since they could know that the odds of success we're stacked in favour of those from privileged backgrounds.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the idea that there is a positive relationship between equality and personal success.
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Suggestion:
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...o succeed or not to be allowed to fail. In contrast, people living in egalitarian ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15925925926 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76665675044 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8474525895 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.083333333 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208558051057 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080863311454 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551309719265 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143451534803 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513807726215 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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