Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.Why is this?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, purchasing goods has become the most popular ways of spare activity in most of the countries especially for young adults. This essay will first discuss the reasons behind this growing trend than follow by why this is a negative development.

The foremost sense following this trend is the increase in elite malls because of which juveniles are giving priority to secondary items. Over a decade, more numbers of such malls were established and only a few places for recreation remained. As a consequence, adolescents are more focus on shopping as their spare time activity. For example at Pokhara, commercial markets are growing rapidly due to the fact that young people are engaging more in shopping goods. In addition, another reason is that there are fashionable competitions between young mass which lead them to visits shops in their leisure time.

With regards to the question, I believe that shopping brings detrimental effects on children growth. Such growing behavior make juveniles concern to collect money as a result, they will be money minded instead of doing other activities in their free times. Also, the competing feeling between young adults leads a negative way. To illustrates, a survey conducted by " Nepal Youth Association" found that around 68% of youngsters were faced the academic problem because of this increasing issue.

To recapitulate, Shopping has been increasing as a prime spare time activity in many nations among kids because of which unhealthy competition and sluggish development in students academic performance. Finally, it is therefore recommended that the Government should invest the budget in building fun parks and more libraries instead of focusing on building malls so that young people can get more option to enjoy their free time.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34385964912 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77586662479 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617543859649 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9540830939 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.153846154 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264820629537 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831388756844 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700732879109 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165622434949 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114035411391 0.056905535591 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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