Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks.
Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
Humans already spent most of their time to improve more and more, so that right now we already obtained technology in our hands. There is a trend where social media catch lots of attention from all age groups. On the other hand, giving personal information on social media could bring detrimental effects. In this essay I will emphasize more on these topics and elaborate my opinion.
On the one hand, social media could easily make us connected to other people that have a far location for us, consequently, from children to elderly citizens find this as good impacts for them. Moreover, we could seek what we wanted easily by surfing on social media websites such as; Line, Instagram, Facebook, etc. In addition, there is a survey that has been conducted in 2016 that stated the majority of social media users are teenagers ( 65%), and then followed by adults (15 %) , children (15%), and elderly citizens (5%).
On the other hand, if you do not cautious enough accessing social media your personal data could be stolen by some hackers, as a result, many citizens bank account could be corrupted or even hackers could spread wrong information by using your name so that there will be multitudes of people that will claim you as a liar, even though you are not the culprit and you will be exiled by the community.
To conclude, if you could utilize social media wisely and carefully, and also find only suitable contents for you. I firmly believe the merits will overcome the demerits
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...rity of social media users are teenagers 65%, and then followed by adults 15 % , ...
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...s 65%, and then followed by adults 15 % , children 15%, and elderly citizens 5%. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, so, then, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1228.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.796875 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38273440227 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609375 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.6924761933 49.4020404114 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.8 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293519834166 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122745369443 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918060147842 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177706055812 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278688864713 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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