Some animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in the sea What are the reason What solution to solve them

There is a blatant fact that the verge of extinction of some species of animals including on land and under ocean is highly recognized by humanity. This essay will first demonstrate the most harmful action that mankind has done to the animal habitat is industrial emission and then submit enacting environmental protection law to prohibit or reduce the detrimental impacts on ecology is the most plausible solution.

The foremost reason for this phenomenon is the pollutants exhaustion from industries. This is because the industrial emission containing noxious chemical substances either polluted the aerial habitat of flying species like birds by carbon monoxide, nitrogen monoxide and so on, or exerted huge impacts on watery environment. These chemicals hinder the respiratory function of animals and due to their flammable abilities leading to forest fire and habitat destruction. The authority of Kien Giang province of Vietnam reported that the occurrence of fire in Cuc Phuong forest resulted from the carbon monoxide emission of Vedan industry had destroyed 85% trees and reduced the monkey population to only eleven ones in 2016.

A possible solution to this problem is enacting environmental protection laws to industries. The government then must prohibit or ban the violated companies, which is dependent on the above laws. This is the case that Ho Chi Minh authorities has recently applied to prevent deteriorative effects on Thi Vai river. They, therefore, ban 3.5 million dollars on Ajinomoto company because of exhaling unused oil to Thi Vai river which caused death to fishes under the river.

To conclude, stemming the extinction of animal species is one of the foremost challenges we have faced so far and it derives mainly from the industrial pollutants, but a viable solution could be applied is the laws of environmental protection.

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Suggestion: pollutants'; pollutant's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, so, then, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37201365188 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88942874488 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600682593857 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.3357351061 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.090909091 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111566497275 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442425229256 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553378530146 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717877548571 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416312987101 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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