Some believe that going to college is the best way to a successful career, while
others believe that it is better to start working after graduating from highschool.
Discuss these two views and give your opinion
"People have different views about the way to success. While attending higher education is believed to be the key to successful career,
having job after finishing highschool is also a popular choice. In my opinion, both of these decisions can lead to a brighter future.
On the one hand, college is considered the shortest path to success. There are a variety of majors that fit one’s interests, such as Education,
Business or Law. Students going to college attempt to gain specialist knowledge about their concerned areas, which is greatly useful for
future job opportunity. Another advantage of attending college is, students have chance to practice, to fail before applying lesson into reality.
They are also requested to have a lot of teamwork, which helps to improve necessary soft skills. In addition, a majority of people find it hard
to get a job without a degree of bachelor in this competitive environment.
On the other hand, I believe that college is the shortest way but not the only way to success. A number of students decide to have jobs as
soon as after graduating from highschool since they have their own paths on their career. A student who has talent in art can be offered a job
to draw for a game design company. Another example, the others who loves business can pursuit that interest by starting up their own ones,
with the help of parents. Those are not requested to have bachelor degree to open the success door.
In conclusion, people are able to choose the appropriate ways to pursuit their dreams, depending on interests and conditions."
- some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation 73
- The charts below show the reasons why undergraduates and postgraduates choose to go to Parker university 78
- nowadays, more and more people decide to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? 84
- Nowadays, many students decide to study in a foreign country. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? 84
- The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012 56
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1345.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03745318352 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78775998206 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59925093633 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7800857075 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.6666666667 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.38176352705 274% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191430538098 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639932107198 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672187506562 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0670509845749 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639893045497 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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