Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home. Do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Tuanvu13 on Tue, 02/28/2017 - 10:39

People think that children can study a lot of things from watching television so children is advisable watch screen tv by both school and at home . I partially agree with this
On the one hand , I believe that , there are various TV programs in Norway , which can help young people in enrich knowledge and release stress the stressful after school hours . For examples , in the Vietnam , Cartoon Network or HBO , star movies programs not only help children gain stress but also it can help those learn english . Specially , television programs as discovery which can assists people in open knowledge about cultures and traditions in a lot of international of the world
On the other hand , i don't think so , watching television is advantages for children . Because of , children watch various tv programs which makes young people don't enjoy outdoor activity , therefore people can make a lot of patiences about obesity and eye such as myopic . Moreover , it can make reduce learning outcome of children at school .
In conclusion , in my opinion , watching tv can bring various advantages and positive for children .

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 918.0 1615.20841683 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 181.0 315.596192385 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07182320442 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67964036816 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 176.041082164 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580110497238 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.6359660733 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.142857143 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.0 7.06120827912 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.01903807615 558% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343871920232 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191392261274 0.084324248473 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108969687255 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25470790376 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106649202701 0.056905535591 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 78.4519038076 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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