These Day , it is believed that children should not spend a lot of time on using smartphones . Although this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that children abuse their cellphones .
On the one hand , i am convinced that children should own a smartphone and use it for some purpose . Firstly , Mobile phones have important functions to the development of children . To my mind , students can easily search information and knowledge when have a trouble about homework , therefore they could receive assistance which can help them achieve many good results . Secondly , Parents can comfortably have a communication with their children . On working-time , The safeness of children often be a nervousness of parents because they away form us. Accordingly , the connection among us could reduce the anxiety of parents .In addition to, the communication between parents and teachers of children would control student which make them be better .
On the other hand , it is understandable why the smartphones addiction have to be stopped.
On top of that , cellphones take so much time and attention of children . In my opinion , smartphones have many types of leisure which make children could focus on it all day . For examples : games or platforms of socialmedia which own many attraction to young people . Accordingly , children easily forget their learning and nervousness about their exercise .Furthermore , many diverse categories of leisure on smartphones make children happy without relationships . What is more dangerous , they don not need make friends so smartphones reduce social communication of young people . Finally , cellphones cause many diseases about eyes such as blindness , low vision which reduce the quality of life of patient. At present , i am suffering low vision due to five years of using smartphones.
In conclusion , there may be some reasons to support children should not spend a lot of time on their smartphones , i strongly believe that this policy is not without drawsbacks and thus should not be implemented by the state.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, what is more, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31790123457 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02971186989 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3127068902 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.352941176 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0588235294 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4117647059 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 50.0 5.01903807615 996% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212890000703 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742098226696 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639813531657 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144572848205 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711249440491 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.