Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your ow
Some young people have become addicted to using smartphones. In my opinion, I think it causes many bad effects on children’s health and learning. I will analyze it based on the following two contents.
ON the one hand, there are several factors that contribute to smartphone abuse. First, in terms of learning smartphone ownership is becoming much more common among young people because their learning requires them to attend virtual classes, research and submit assignments online as WELL as finding the necessary information on the Internet. Secondly, about social communication, social networks like Facebook or Tiktok have become the main formS of communication for young people so if children do not regularly access social networks, they will probably be left behind. In response to the increasing information on Internet and this also makes them social distanced. It is these things that make smartphone time escalate without parental control.
ON the other hand, I think the excessive use of smartphones causes many adverse effects on young people. The first is the health risks. being glued to a smartphone screen for hours a day that will cause young people to develop nearsightedness and other vision-impairing diseases. More over, the overuse of smartphones will make it impossible for them to participate in other outdoor physical activities and a sedentary lifestyle is the culprit of obesity. The second is about learning, the academic results in school are worse because they may be tempted by online games, youtube videos or social media posts and DO NOT spend enough time practicing and doing homework.
In summary, it has many factors, including an emphasis on online learning, the proliferation of social media, and a lack of parental supervision, which increases the time children spendING on smartphones. I think this trend is bad for children’s physical health and school performance.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Being
... people. The first is the health risks. being glued to a smartphone screen for hours ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...media posts and DO NOT spend enough time practicing and doing homework. In summa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in summary, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35430463576 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93970555969 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576158940397 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8900724153 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15591479109 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520249067009 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397760101384 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986429370871 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033206581953 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Being
... people. The first is the health risks. being glued to a smartphone screen for hours ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 637, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...media posts and DO NOT spend enough time practicing and doing homework. In summa...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in summary, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35430463576 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93970555969 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576158940397 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8900724153 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15591479109 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520249067009 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397760101384 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986429370871 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033206581953 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.