Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently.Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach yo

Of widely-held concerns regarding modern family life, the question of whether the aged had better live with their relatives or separately gains a huge controversy. This essay will discuss the debate and give a concluding view.
On the one hand, advocates might find evidence that extended family life supports all family members in terms of emotional aspects during such life events as times of crisis like a bereavement. Likewise, to some extent, personal insecurity might be reduced thanks to the prevention from various dangers, ranging from accidents to thieving/kidnapping. Last but not least, living in a multi-generational family could lighten the burden of living cost, for instance with lower food and utility expense, which brings more enjoyment of life.
Conversely, those who promote the idea that the senior family members should live an independent life claim that the more self-reliant the elderly people are, the more their self-esteem are boosted and the less mental decline they might suffer in their old age. They also highlight younger families’ difficulties in housing space or lack of available time, which prevent them from providing older member proper care. It is indeed true that many grandparents’ infrequent visits to grandchildren due to distance could generate more expectations which make their visits more important and memorable.
Overall, it seems to me that the argument that senior residents live in separate accommodations is more persuasive since this benefits them and their family both physically and mentally. Nonetheless, cautions relating to health and finance should be taken into account to avoid unexpected problems which might arise.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... concerns regarding modern family life, the question of whether the aged had better live with their rel...
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Line 2, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dence that extended family life supports all family members in terms of emotional...
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Line 2, column 541, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, which brings more enjoyment of life. Conversely, those who promote the idea t...
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Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...accommodations is more persuasive since this benefits them and their family both phy...
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Line 4, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... unexpected problems which might arise.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, if, likewise, nonetheless, regarding, so, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54826254826 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03561346212 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.679536679537 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1673125678 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.7 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16951836871 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635022569191 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445053922465 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104867648524 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297671606926 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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