In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Health is the physical and mental state of a body free from diseases and infirmities.

In the antique, specifically during hunting and pastoral era people being engaged in physical labour helped them maintained their fitness level and health. However, with the development of technology, life is made comfortable limiting our efforts which sequentially resulted in weight gain declining ou health status.

It is often argued that in some countries. obesity is increasing significantly leaving ill effects on individual health. I do agree the statement. Way of living and foodstuffs consumed are two main factors to determine our health state. People are wanting time for morning exercise now a days because of their tight work schedule. Most of the obese people are either couch potato or those enjoying sedentary life. Adults are found to be lured with fast foods in eatery which are rich in sugar,fat and carbohydrates . These foodstuffs have profound effect on health . Secondly, caffeinated drinks, soda water and beverage cannot be neglected in this context too.

Talking about the solution, morning exercise should be made mandatory in everyone's routine. Weekly schedule need to be made in using mode of transport i.e choice should be made between automobiles and bicycle. Balanced diet is must to beat the challenge the problems of weight gain. Oily foods , sweet which catalyze us in suffering from obesity should be controlled. Gathering should be enjoyed with fruits juices not with beverages to prevent oneself from being overweight. Sedentary life style should be converted into sessile one even by high level professionalists like CEO of banks, politician and so on as "Health is wealth".
For instance, my father although being an octogenarian is leading a healthy life free of health hazards because of his daily workout and paying special attention to his eating.
In a nutshell, health is superior of all so one need to start healthy habits from today to say precisely is from now to be free from any sorts of health problems and to enjoy the life till life ends.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s and to enjoy the life till life ends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, in fact, talking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22781065089 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79153933186 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630177514793 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.3590123349 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.35 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189537296989 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564609879888 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356917940618 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902584433636 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480549306477 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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