In some countries the average worker is obliged to retire at the age of 50, while in others is obliged to retire until they are 65 or 70. Until what age do you think people should be encouraged to remain in paid employment?

Our global diaspora is broadly segregated into two halves, oriental and occidental. Therefore, are bound to be difference in social, economical and cultural front as well. The issue weather workers should be obliged to retire at age 50, 65 or 70 is no exception and irrefutable. There are advantages and disadvantages associated with retiring earlier and retiring late in live.Ultimately, I opine that people should retire at the age of 70. I will explain why with pertinent argument and examples. There are myriad of argument in favor of my stance the most conspicuous one is that retiring at age 70 will help the productivity of the company. Older ones are vase with industrial experience that they can pass on to newly employed staff.
Another, pivotal aspect of my argument is that if people retire at age 50 or 60 they become liability to the government. Moreover, they can become depress as well, which can lead to more serious health issues.
Furthermore, underpinning the aforementioned an empirical aspect of my argument is that retiring at 50 or 60 has it own advantages such as relieve from work related stress and pressure that can send them to there early grave.
Although the situation seems dire, but there are several steps we can take to make tangle changes. Firstly, older ones should be given the opportunity to make a decision on when there are ready to retire. Secondly, federal and state government should implement a law that will help take good care of older ones once they retired.
To conclude, I would like to say that although retiring at 70 is highly beneficial but we must be prudent to strike a balance, logical and rational approach towards the same for the optimal and fruitful outcomes of efforts or utilization of resources.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93288590604 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82876153231 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580536912752 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0804164664 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289353039282 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962758892752 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111633504649 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133875302019 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986198333447 0.056905535591 173% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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