in some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health proble, as a result of eating too much fast food it is therefore necessary to government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food
These days, more and more people are eating junk food in many countries around the world, these has led to various problems. Although, it has been suggested that government should text heavily on such food. I partially agree with this statement because there are plenty of other ways to reduce the health problems, which I will outline below.
Generally speaking, the main reason why it has become mandatory for the government to improve the higher taxes on the conventional food is that affordability of this kind of food. By this I mean that fast food are very cheaper so that anyone can buy this with ease. For instance, fast food companies such as, McDonald, dominos, and Pizza Hut are selling pizza and burgers at nominal rate, so that anyone can eat them as a result, higher some people are consuming this food, which in turn leads to various health this is such as obesity, and diabetes . if, government tax heavily on junk food, people will avoid them, and health issue related to this will be decrease
despite these, based on my knowledge, there are number of other ways to reduce the health problem. Firstly, government should raise awareness in a society. For example, they should promote healthy diet and regular exercise, through this step people will become more conscious about their health and started avoiding fast food and pre prepared meals. Furthermore, we individuals have to do something about our health because it is our life in our body. If, we do not bother about our self, government ,or even any other person could not do anything.
In conclusion,I believe that it important for the government to improve higher tax on the junk food to reduce health problem related to this, but government as well as, individuals can take other action to overcome this problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, well, for example, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92786885246 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43910850278 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.0887390755 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.25 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5833333333 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337201596094 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124580923838 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746946612993 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203828014324 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087226377278 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.