In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this overweigh the disavantage?
Nowadays, it is a fact that parents prioritize on teaching their children at home rather than sending them to school. Although homeschooling is beneficial to some extent, I am of the opinion that the disadvantages is far outweigh the advantages.
On the one hand, there is a host of reasons for parents who give preference to home education. First of all, bullying and harassment have become seriously phenomenon in many schools which leads to many adverse impacts on students such as depression and anxiety. That is a reason why parents choose to keep their child at home to protect them from both mental and physical problems. Secondly, children who learn at home would get full attention of their parents and carers.these people have clearly awareness of children’s weakness and strengths. As a result, homeschooling child might excel in study and achieve greater academic results.
On the other hand, I argue that school is a vital part of people development. Human is social being and school is an excellent way to build a network of friends and a like-minded community. These connections and relationships can offer them guidance through the normal life and future career. In addition, school education provides not only basic knowledge but also soft skills such as team building and communication. It is proven that successful opportunities in career of individuals who posses a mastery of both social skills and knowledge is incredibly higher than those just focus on learning theories in book.
In conclusion, despite the fact that there are some merits of homeschooling, I totally believe that the drawbacks of this is far outweigh its benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...n those just focus on learning theories in book. In conclusion, despite the fact ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1396.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17037037037 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99916769433 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5229321845 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.384615385 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25423143286 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779984331291 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751071535493 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1379102023 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686346569265 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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