In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
In several countries, the young are often told that they can reach every goal if they put in enough effort. Despite the obvious advantages of this trend, there are also some undeniable drawbacks.
On the one hand, these words of encouragement make children stronger. Every child wants to be recognized by the world, so they make an attempt to achieve their objectives, no matter how difficult they are. This is their developing motivation, and over time, children become better versions of themselves. In their journey to conquering success, children not only need to be intelligent and energetic but also very persistent in what they are doing. Therefore, this message helps the young to practice patience- one of the most essential elements contributing to everybody’s success and happiness.
On the other hand, this saying from adults has some bad impacts on the growth of the young. It has a high potential to make children feel extremely stressed. Because of the obsession with the words “success” and “try hard”, children will tend to think that they have to achieve their objectives by all means, if they don’t want to be called losers. Those children have a high risk of suffering from some mental illnesses. Furthermore, in case of children can not reach their goals, they will feel self-conscious and no longer believe in their capacity. From there, they highly likely do not want to make any significant change and live mundane lives for a long time.
In conclusion, children from many parts of the world are repeatedly told that every dream will come true unless they do not try hard enough. This message stem from adults’s hopes that their children will have a bright future, it brings children lots of motivation but also makes them depressed sometimes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08474576271 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6900478376 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586440677966 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.32678514 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402938447862 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129845487466 0.084324248473 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634410640806 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257593483602 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262377990199 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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