The importance of being quite hardworking is delivered by some culturally to the juveniles as a key factor of the achievement. It is the fact that triggering children to do their best has positive impact on their character and gives them more enthusiasm to be successful in their future life, however, there are also some drawbacks to be considered.
First of all, a belief of the trend that everything depends on their own hands to obtain anything in their life gives a chance to build a strong character to the juveniles who desire to achieve their targets by struggling and competing with their peers. They try to differentiate themselves from other ones who are less hardworking. As these process continues in a society, it should create a self-confident individuals, even great leaders among them. Moreover, having told to children that the more they try, the more they achieve their desires, increases their faith to be successful in their whole life and the level of self-confidence.
On the other hand, it could be some psychological effects which injure some children adversely by giving them too much pressure by society. They can be felt depressive and in the result of this there would create a unhappy generation with full of mental problems, such as paranoia or schizophrenia. In addition to this, the encouragement of children should not be overweight their capacities. For example, being disabled is not a problem unless nobody demands him or her to do something which is not proper for her or his capability. That is why, the encouragement must be feasible. Otherwise, it might bring about the increase of suicides in a society which is governed such kind of cultural pressures.
In conclusion, while telling children the role of hardworking to get their targets is instructive in their success and future life, it might also have negative impacts on children that destroy their whole life and transfer them mentally disable people in the society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'individual'?
Suggestion: individual
...iety, it should create a self-confident individuals, even great leaders among them. Moreove...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n the result of this there would create a unhappy generation with full of mental ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05521472393 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93899609887 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539877300613 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.5325011173 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.769230769 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193074990714 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717990143488 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526473208551 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116726521407 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341436978329 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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